'Justice At Night' Recast - Joe's Diary Entry

I haven't slept. How can one sleep? The funny thing is, i'm not even tired.

Every time my eyelids become heavy and gradually lower till there is not even a slit of white, the sound of the fire blazing and the disgusting chants repetitively echo through the walls of my head. How could we just stand there? The clenching of my fists seem like a newly discovered habit, I felt SO helpless. Why didn't i do something...anything...

The place was infested with motivated middle-aged men, their eyes inappropriately searching for their prey and their hearts filled with the dirt they usually work in. I raged with sincere anger, looking at their excited faces.

Then they brought him in...or should i say dragged. The tired twisted ropes wrapped around his young, half-naked body as if he was guilty. Everyone knew otherwise, but the crowds still roared with triumph.

He was then poached upon the roof, the last time he could feel a sense of security, a sense of stability...

At that point i could barely look, his body trembled like a scared puppy backed in a corner. He then shouted, with every bit of energy that remained, every last bit of hope...

"Boss, I didn't do nuthin, don't burn me boss"

At that point a shiver ran through the crowd in unison.

The car began to move as the noose tightened around his delicate neck, at that point a terrible, whimpering cry was heard. I quickly snapped my eyes shut.

The last thing i heard was the hissing of the fire sprawled upon his figure and the swinging of his angelic body.

A frustrated tear swam across my face, until the point i was dripping in my own tears.

How i wish i stayed in the useless car.

Joe.

Commentary:

The use of the short sentences, rhetorical questions and ellipsis in the opening paragraph is used to imitate the thinking process of Joe, this is appropriate for a confidential diary entry as they have a spontaneous and personal tone. These techniques also engage the audiences and give an insight to the readers of how she feels e.g. doubting herself. The personification 'infested' as well as words like 'roared' and 'prey' was used to create animal imagery in describing the locals at the lynching. The metaphor 'their hearts were filled with dirt...usually work in' is used to reinforce their insensitive and impure nature and also ...I used the alliteration 'tired' and 'twisted' to explain the ,

tired twisted - alliteration

snapped - onomatopeia

'angelic'

swam - personification

'dirt they usually worked in' - farm

'wrapped' - subjugated

repetition of . a sense of stability, a sense of security

delicate , young